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l-l Shoulder Angel l-l
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NOOOOOOO!!!! NOT MORE POETRY! MAKE IT STOP!
Yes, thats right. The carnage and mass murder of great peotry writers continues as is I single handedly slaughter and assault all that is good in the name of poetry for my own amusement. The request for proper critiqueing still stands~

If-?
If I kissed the ground you walk on
Would you turn and look my way?
If I told you I was dying
By my bedside would you stay?
If I profess my love
Would you say you love me too?
If I ask you to marry me
Would you say "I do"?
Out of all the things I could have said
And all I wished I'd done
As I sit and think them through
I wish I'd change just one
If I'd made my pressence more apparent
would you've acknowledged me?
Had I told you I was dying
Then to my grave would you come see?
If I'd worked up the courage
To tell you I loved you
Would things be different then they are now?
These things I wish I knew
Now my tears match my regrets
And as I lay here writing
I wish I'd lived life differently
And now it's death I'm fighting
So my dear, a'do
And of this poem
Here's to you






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-Babydoll Gone Wrong-
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comment Commented on: Wed Apr 09, 2008 @ 10:01pm
YAY! First Post Hell YEAH!

WOOOO~! GUMSHOE~!

heart heart heart heart heart

You already know that I like this one. Not critiques here, cuz I suck at it.


comment Commented on: Mon Apr 14, 2008 @ 02:49am
I don't see why you think your terrible at poetry... I love it!

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