A cold winter wonderland

• Artist: InkheartKitty16
• Description: It's not my best work, in my opinion. Please, no rude comments, i just ignore them and they hurt my feelings, so plz, dont write them. So about the story its just about a girl and her bf and the guy in the end kills her. So, yeah, plz do NICE comments.
• Date: 12/23/2008
• Tags: cold winter wonderland

The snow gently falls around us,
onto my chocolate brown hair,
onto his golden brown hair,
catches on our long lashes,
makes a winter wonderland,
making a happy, beautiful scene,
but, his voice brings avalanches,
the sound so loud,
i shudder as he yells,
his anger radiates into the air,
melting snow,
he, thought i slept with another,
a lie, but he believed it all the same,
he walks closer to me,
i start to back away but he grabs me by the arm,
hits me again and again,
soon, the light begins to fade,
the world grows colder than before,
i pass out for the last time in that cold winter wonderland.

Comments

[Marie-Boe101]

awesome poem lol!! do you have a good grade in language arts lol jk you dont have to tell me but you have so many good describing works

[baby-o-girl3]

Omg what a wonderful poem my sister writes poems but yours are just WOW!

[Kaman-chan]

wow..its really..how do you say it? dramatic XD..its fine

[LunaticTokyoMoth]

OMG! *speechless, mouth hangs down to the floor*

[kiwijian_01]

holy dang...das AWSUM AZ....

[xHAMR]

How do I say this...? Oh, I know: "HOLY s**t!"

I'm not going to lie, that poem was very powerful and had an excellent rhyme scheme that helped to make convey falling snow; serene and tranquil, flowing and endless.

I got a shiver reading this. Five out of five for you!