Remembering

• Artist: R3cKL3sS_aNg3L
• Description: This is pain of my past that im proud to say ive overcome. It may make no sense to some, but someday may make sense to all. I went through this to find out something so simple: Everyone deserves to smile and no man or girl should frown under the thought of someone walking away from their life and has no good reason for doing so. Well feel free to laugh at my stupidity, even if you feel it wrong to do so. Truthfully, i find myself laughing at it too sometimes.
• Date: 12/31/2008
• Tags: remembering

She remembered it clear as day
When she slipped in his kiss and tumbled into love
When she drowned in his stare
As his milk chocolatey eyes poured into her own
She remembered being reborn
When his soft lips pressed against hers
And her body rushed into the excitement of feeling alive
But now.....Now hes gone
And her body crashed into dullness and the feelingof being dead
She trys to forget
But that only brings more pain
For trying to forget the best of memories
Hurt more than remebering the worst

Comments

[Fiingerling]

Thank you so much for commenting on my work, so I decided that I'd come repay you with a nice little comment on how you did.
To be honest, I'd read so many things that had meaning and feelings, and this is by far one of the best ones. It's really good, and I can't wait for more. =] 5/5

[Miss Salsa Sam]

Your poem is very good. It has a great topic, and shows that you wrote this poem with compassion and feeling. Althought you are right, it is a little hard to understand and there is one spelling mistake. It is pretty good. BRAVO!