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Christmas,Christmas
I can see it coming,
Christmas,Christmas
Everyone so caring and loving,
Christmas,Christmas,
I see a big tree,
Christmas,Christmas
With presents beneath,
Christmas,Christmas
Stockings are hanging for santa to come,
Christmas,Christmas
If i go to sleep he will come to my home,
Christmas,Christmas
Gingerbread cookies and egg nog for me,
Christmas,Christmas
We'll leave santa some cookies as well,
Christmas,Christmas
I can't wait for you now!
- by Platypus-Nerd |
- Holiday Poem Contest
- | Submitted on 12/06/2008 |
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- Title: Christmas,Christmas
- Artist: Platypus-Nerd
- Description: a random christmas poem and i know its crappy but it was my best
- Date: 12/06/2008
- Tags: christmas time
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Comments (5 Comments)
- InnocentHana4ever - 08/20/2010
- Some good bad parts
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- Any Costa - 04/07/2009
- Here in Brazil, Christmas time all people just talk about it. "Christmas, Christmas" is all we hear... Don't give up! Keep writing. I liked.
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- Shikaku Rin - 03/01/2009
- The "Christmas, Christmas" got really repetitive and didn't add much to the poem. Dividing it into stanzas and making the first line of each stanza be "Christmas, Christmas" might have worked better just so that we can get a flow to the poem.
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- carlisle cullen lover - 01/05/2009
- i agree you need some rhyming but other than that it is pretty good.
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- ll W E i R D - G A S M ll - 12/20/2008
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its pretty good [:
if you just added some rhyming into it,
there could be a good rythm going on there [:
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