Darkness

• Artist: exhume
• Description: This is a poem I wrote about a year ago when I was upset.
• Date: 10/29/2008
• Tags: darkness

Darkness follows
where I hide
hatred reminds me
of all those lies

Remember you
your smile, your face
felt that pain
every single day

Run 'till my death
'till I fall in exhaust
hope taken from me
in a world which I'm lost

Dwell upon the past
when I used to be free
No matter where
darkness will find me

Comments

[II iSaku Blossom II]

This is very nice. You deserve a 5/5~

[Senkita]

This is really quite good...it's short and sweet, *nods approvingly*
Excellent use of rhythm

[Renata Of the Volturi]

Great poem!!!!!!! 5 starz!

[Neopharmaphobic]

You have a really fluid and creative style. Your poem is fantastic!! Keep up the writing; if you submit anything else, I will be sure to read.

And thank you for the kind words in your comment. I really appreciate it ^^

[Tetsugen]

Im sure your a girl.... but I could be wrong which in any case this poem was great. Not so much for originality but the work and thought behind it was exquisite. Good Job 4/5 smile

[-T I V E N I]

dude!!
i love your poem!!
nice job!!!