me and her

• Artist: Jen_Johnson94
• Description: of how my everyday seems fights, people getting hurt. a very short poem, don't worry you'll live.
• Date: 12/25/2008
• Tags: your said angry fighting hate

I try to be everything you wish I could be.

Yet every time I try too hard but fail to be what you want to see.

I may not be be perfect. Damn, its miracle that I can at least try.

You say you love me, but do you really mean that.

Or is an excuse to say how I failed you.

Comments

[zoeybird95]

good... what about my sister's her name is vampiress_cutie2013. she wrote tornado, remembering you, and the world won't give. check them out... they are all poetry and lyrics

[peacekitten65]

Good. I would like to see your other work cuz you definatly have talent. I can definatly see the intence feelings there. The only thing is it sounds you are just spilling your heart out. Don't get me wrong, that's what you're supposed to do, but it sounds like you are just aving a conversation. Try to uses less words per lines.
Great referance pic though. 4/5 biggrin
One of the best I've read tonight.

[Jen_Johnson94]

Thanks for the commenting. I use"i"'s for a reason but if it bothers people, I will fix them. Thank you, though.

[Luminous Mist]

"how i failed"
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I will consider you a dumbass from now on, because you apparently don't know how to use proper capitalization.

[Your Reincarnation]

Its really good. It reaminds me of "Faded" by everlife. It saying how the person has faded into what the other wants. Listen to it: http://media.imeem.com/m/xUgEpRg7Ri