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In the darkness it’s clear as day-
A silver silhouette:
A body lying motionless
In a pool of deep regret.
The shadow of what once had been;
Of a rose with twisted thorns…
A fallen angel stranded here
She’s Innocent no more.
On this night, she hid alone
And whispered a quiet goodbye.
She hung her head in the silence
Tears brimming her eyes- but did not cry.
She took each knife with bitter pride-
And never said a word.
To even reconsider now
Would surely be absurd.
In the darkness it’s clear as day-
A silver silhouette.
The shadow of what once had been
And of a fate…
Never met.
- Title: The Complexities Of Simplicity
- Artist: _Roooose_
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- Date: 12/26/2008
- Tags: complexities simplicity
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Comments (4 Comments)
- Kibroth - 02/02/2009
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Very nice, yet again.
If I didn't know better, I'd think that this may be a "self descriptive" poem...at least in regards to your SN.
Suggestions- in stanza 4 line 3 & 4, I'd consider removal of "even" and replacement of "surely" with "truly", although I'm not completely happy with that either...
Stanza 5, the least invasive fix: change line 4 to "Of a fate envisioned".
Tasty stuff. *smack * smack* 4/5
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- Cottoncandyocbra3 - 01/25/2009
- Again, one of my favorites of your material. I like the vocabulary you use, and the picture I get in my mind.
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- the silver belladonna - 12/27/2008
- this is really good its amazing
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- CannibalWizards - 12/27/2008
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Whoa.
That was REALLY Good.
Im a fan now.
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