Ash's First Kiss

• Artist: Simply A Detective
• Description: a pokemon romance between misty and ash. its really sweet, and IMPOSSIBLE!!! it includes brock!
• Date: 11/27/2008
• Tags: ashs first date

ash sat with misty, and slurped his tempura. ash? yes swee- i mean misty? will u come with me to a dance? yes! ash jumped up and spilt brocks miso soup. he was asking nurse joy on a date. yes! brock fainted, because a very pretty lady had said yes. misty stood up, and ash jumped up and bumped into misty. he pulled her close and passinatly kissed her. brock woke and stared. eek burning_eyes he grabbed nurse joy and kissed her, but she pushed him away. gasp! that was terrific ash! biggrin really?




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Comments

[StrikeFreedomX10]

horrible
1/5

[Darkly_Doomed]

Punctuation and capitalization would be nice. And Ash already had his first kiss. And probably second, third, fourth, and fifth also.

[MachJacob]

You need to put speech marks in, put CAPITAL letters in and write you instead of u. 1/5

[Kat-loves-yuu]

I didn't really get it, but maybe if you included like " and , etc the readers will understand it more =)

[Simply A Detective]

its a draft

[Orbit_white_chewing_gum]

there's such a thing as writing "you" instead of "u"

[C h i k a r i B e a n]

You're right, that is impossible. sweatdrop